The Unification Chronicles

Okay, Rev­e­la­tion is not only done, but all 30 chap­ters of the first draft have been posted here for your mock­ing enjoy­ment. I have about a half dozen scenes that need to be added and/​or fleshed out in the next draft, which, con­trary to my orig­i­nal plan, I think I’m not going to tackle until I start the first draft of Mis­taken Iden­tity, book 4 in the series. Basi­cally, I want to fin­ish telling Daniel Cho’s story before I start revis­ing it, so if any­thing really sur­pris­ing comes up in Cru­sade or Jihad, or even the begin­ning of Mis­taken Iden­tity, fea­tur­ing Daniel as an old man finally see­ing his dream project of human­ity going to the stars come to fruition — he dies before the star­ship Envoy returns as a crushed beer can — then I’ll be able to fore­shadow it in Rev­e­la­tion. Fore­shad­ow­ing (“Your key to qual­ity lit­er­a­ture,” says Berke Breathed) is one of those things like theme that are really best addressed in rewrites, when you know with­out a doubt where you’ll end up and how.

Oddly, I don’t feel the same sense of accom­plish­ment I did when I fin­ished the orig­i­nal Between Heaven and Hell. Keep in mind that even though I wrote that 13 years ago, this is the first full-​​length novel I’ve fin­ished since that time. The first draft of Mis­taken Iden­tity, writ­ten from 2000 – 2003, ran longer than this — 80,000 words com­pared to just over 71,000 for Rev­e­la­tion — but I stopped writ­ing it a cou­ple chap­ters from the end. It was never actu­ally fin­ished. Home­world remains stalled at a bit over 60,000 words, well into act 3.

So I fin­ished a novel. I should feel relieved, right? A sense of “wow, that was some­thing!” Only I don’t. Mostly, I’m glad to get the damn thing out of the way so I can start writ­ing Cru­sade — of which I’m already 737 words into just from this after­noon. Is that it? Am I not really cel­e­brat­ing fin­ish­ing a whole novel just because there are six more in line behind it? I won’t be done writ­ing the whole series until late next year, and I won’t be done with revi­sions until well into 2011. It’s a long war, and this was just the first battle.

Any­one else sud­denly depressed, or is it just me?

Any­way, read through the rough draft and let me know what you think. I’m already com­pil­ing notes for the revi­sion, even if I don’t actu­ally start it until March or so.

30: The Hunt Begins

“Assis­tant Direc­tor Gottlieb’s office,” Stacy said.

“Hi, Stacy, it’s Jack. Can you put me through to Lou?”

Lou’s sec­re­tary low­ered her voice. “You out of your frickin’ mind call­ing here? Lou’s really pissed, Jack.”

“I know, Stacy, but offi­cially, I still work for the guy. I’ve been back in coun­try for a week and I need to report in.”

“Your funeral,” she said, and put Jack on hold. Lou picked up just a cou­ple sec­onds later.

“Do you have any idea,” he said, “what the fuck you’ve done, Jack?”

Prob­a­bly bet­ter than you do, Jack thought. “Apart from uncov­er­ing an ancient conspiracy — “

“Spare me, Jack” Lou said. “No one gives a shit but you and the whack­a­dos you’ve fallen in with.”

“The media doesn’t seem to agree with you, Lou.”

“We’ll have the media under con­trol soon enough. They’re champ­ing at the bit now, but they’ll fade in time. Six months from now, every­one will have for­got­ten you and your lit­tle rev­e­la­tion. The only rea­son you and the rest were allowed back on US soil was that deny­ing you entry would have lent cred­i­bil­ity to Richardson’s story.

“You’ve always been an ide­al­ist, Jack. You have no idea how the world really works. It’s not like your bud­dies in the mil­i­tary. This is the real world. You have to be flexible.”

“And by flex­i­ble, you mean sell me out to demons?”

Lou laughed, an angry lit­tle sound. “Call ‘em what you like, Jack. They hold the power, and the rest of us do what we’re told. Sides don’t mat­ter, Jack. Get past the names and it’s all the same.”

Keep talk­ing, Jack said. He glanced over at Dante, who spun his fin­ger in the air. Keep going.

“I thought you were a patriot,” Jack said.

“Jack, I would think you of all peo­ple would under­stand. There are no patri­ots. There are sur­vivors, and there’s you. I’m a survivor.”

Dante gave Jack a thumbs up. Time to pull the plug.

“I can’t tell you how sorry I am to hear that,” Jack said. “And you may as well call off the agents you have con­verg­ing on my loca­tion in Sil­ver Springs. The one you’ve traced this call to? I’m not actu­ally there.”

Lou sput­tered.

“I called to ten­der my res­ig­na­tion,” Jack said. “Well, mine and Ana­lyst Hicks. We’re both going to be pur­su­ing other opportunities.”

“You bas­tard,” Lou said. “You can’t quit. You’re fired.”

“What­ever helps you sleep at night, Lou. And don’t bother clean­ing up after your­self. Agent Hicks pig­gy­backed off this call into the FBI net­work and down­loaded the secu­rity tapes of you allow­ing in those two demons, along with footage of what they tried to do in the lab. We’ll be releas­ing those to the media presently.”

Lou said noth­ing, but Jack enjoyed the shade of red he knew that his now for­mer boss’s face must be.

“So long, Lou. Pray to what­ever god you actu­ally believe in that you don’t see me again.”

#

Susan tabbed over to see look at the lat­est traf­fic stats again. New Amer­i­can Cen­tury, now under her con­trol, was blow­ing up. Dante had set up the new blog on a server that scaled to incom­ing traf­fic demands, and the hits just kept going up and up and up.

In a way, deny­ing her story was the best thing the gov­ern­ment could have done for her. For some rea­son, the pub­lic had been con­di­tioned to believe the oppo­site of what their elected rep­re­sen­ta­tives told them. So when they were told by Peo­ple In Author­ity that this was all a hoax, that demons weren’t real, then the pub­lic believed the Susan was indeed on to something.

She was still writ­ing fol­low up arti­cles, analy­sis and reply­ing to thou­sands of com­ments. Uriel had assured her that she was safe against any direct reprisals from the demons, and she had no rea­son to doubt his word. So she sat in her apart­ment and rode the wave for all it was worth.

She made sure to star all the requests for inter­views in her inbox. Now that she was safely back in the US, all the major net­works wanted to get her in stu­dio for on-​​camera inter­views. Susan felt it was a great oppor­tu­nity to test drive the net­works and see where she wanted to land when all this was over.

She jot­ted down a note to call Daniel later. She knew he was still griev­ing for his fam­ily, and she needed to cheer him up. She shouldn’t be the only one to ben­e­fit from what they’d gone through.

#

Daniel sat in his apart­ment and stared. He wasn’t star­ing at any­thing in par­tic­u­lar, just the way the end table butted up against the wall. He had a day’s growth of beard on his chin, and was wear­ing the same clothes he’d worn the day before, the clothes he put on after that shower in Frankfurt.

His boss had assured him his old job was wait­ing for him, but to take his time. He didn’t want Daniel to rush into things before he was ready. Daniel knew that his boss was hes­i­tant to take him back at all, and that the angels had leaned on him. He could hear it in his voice. The same tone peo­ple used when talk­ing to the men­tally unstable.

But wasn’t that what he was, now? What he’d been for quite some time, if he was hon­est with him­self? He knew how ridicu­lous it sounded. That he, who trained to be a healer, would be fol­lowed around by death? Not his death, but the death of any­one near him, any­one whose life he touched. It wasn’t what he wanted. But it was what he was.

He was the angel of death.

Daniel shook his head. I really am tip­ping over the edge, he thought as he got up and walked into the kitchen for another beer. It was only mid-​​morning, but he told him­self the sun was over the yardarm somewhere.

He heard a knock on the door as he was walk­ing back to his recliner. The sound star­tled him because it was unex­pected. He’d expected to be over­whelmed by paparazzi when he got home, but things had been oddly quiet. No one called to bother him. No one camped out in front of his apart­ment. He sup­posed he had the angels to thank for that, but he wasn’t in the mood to thank any­one for anything.

He walked over and opened the door. He saw Jack stand­ing in his door­way, once again dressed in his “G-​​man” black suit. He only needed a fedora to com­plete the look. Over Jack’s shoul­der he saw a black Crown Vic con­tain­ing Sandy and Dante, both sim­i­larly attired.

“Jack,” he said. He kept his voice neutral.

“Daniel, it’s good to see you,” Jack said. “Do you mind if I come in?”

“Be my guest.”

Daniel trudged back to his chair and sat down.

Jack walked in, shut the door. “Daniel, we need your help.”

“Again?”

“More like still,” Jack said, tak­ing a seat on the couch across from Daniel. “I’m not with the FBI anymore.”

“Wardrobe notwith­stand­ing.”

“I know you’re tired,” Jack said.

“That’s an understatement.”

“And I know you would rather go the rest of your days with­out see­ing another immor­tal, but we need you.”

“We, in this case, being you, Sandy and Dante out in the car?”

“Among oth­ers,” Jack said. “Geez, what I’m about to say still sounds ridicu­lous, even to me. But you’re one of the few peo­ple who would under­stand. We’re cre­at­ing a task force to take down the demons. We’re going to hunt them down and destroy them, every sin­gle one of them.”

Daniel raised an eye­brow. “You and what army?”

“We’re build­ing an army,” Jack said. “That’s why I’m here. I want you on my team.”

“You want me to fight even more demons, on purpose?”

“Well, yeah.”

“Go to hell, Jack.”

Jack’s head dropped. “Daniel, I know what you’ve been through. I was there.”

“Were you?” Daniel said. “Were you in my fam­ily home in San Fran­cisco when the demons burned it to the ground with my fam­ily still in it? Were you there when they raped my sis­ters? When they made my mother watch?”

“I begged you not to watch that video.”

“I’m an alba­tross, Jack. I’m the angel of fuck­ing death. I’m a doc­tor who not only man­ages to kill his patients, I man­age to get any­one killed who’s dumb enough to get close to me. You don’t want me on your team.”

“Yes, I do, Daniel. We’re plan­ning on four man units, small and nim­ble. Each man will fight, but we’ll also have other mis­sion sup­port spe­cial­ties. Sandy is ordi­nance and pro­cure­ment, I’m intel­li­gence, Dante’s triple C. We need a medic. And I hap­pen to know some­one who’s not just a tal­ented trauma sur­geon, but also is the only known human to kill one of these bas­tards. You flipped Batarel into the steel in Beth­le­hem, not me. You know how to fight the demons.”

“Pass,” Daniel said, and took a swig of his beer.

“Dammit, Daniel, we can’t take no for an answer!”

“That’s what you’re get­ting, Jack. I’m done with those fuckers.”

“What about your fam­ily? Don’t you want revenge?”

“Hell yes, I want revenge. But I’m also smart enough to know I won’t get it. Batarel was a fluke, Jack. You can’t kill these things. Not consistently.”

“I refuse to believe that.”

“You can refuse to believe a lot of things. They’ll still kill you.”

“Then at least I’ll die fight­ing for some­thing I do believe in. And I believe in free­dom. Until the demons are gone, the human race won’t be free.”

“We never were, Jack. You were okay with it when you didn’t know.”

“Dammit, I know now! I can’t let this go!”

Daniel smiled. “How does it feel? Now you know why I ran, why I didn’t just pipe down in that police sta­tion, admit to what they said I did.”

“Fuck you, Daniel. Maybe you aren’t who I thought you were. Enjoy being your angel of death.”

Jack stood up and walked to the door.

“Wait,” Daniel said.

Was that it? Was it that sim­ple? Was destroy­ing the demons why he was here? [insert some­thing ear­lier in the book with Daniel’s mom about God’s pur­pose]. Maybe his mother had been right. Maybe every­one did have a des­tiny. And maybe this was his.

“What,” Jack said. It wasn’t really a question.

Daniel stood up. “I’m in.”

29: Rev­e­la­tion

The Iraqi Air 737 touched down at Frank­furt Inter­na­tional a lit­tle after 3 AM local time. Daniel, Jack and Susan grabbed what lit­tle they had and trudged down the cen­tral aisle. Daniel had the scroll and hel­met in a carry-​​on gym bag, and for­tu­nately air­port secu­rity at Bagh­dad had been will­ing to accept a thou­sand dol­lars US to pre­tend they’d never seen the arti­facts leave their coun­try. Things in that coun­try were get­ting bet­ter, but not very much. Cor­rup­tion was still the rule of the day.

None of them had slept on the trip up, even though they were all beyond exhausted. They also hadn’t talked, even though they had adjoin­ing seats. Any time one of them seemed to start, it was all too obvi­ous that the most vocif­er­ous mem­ber of their team wasn’t with them. Daniel felt like he couldn’t even look Susan or Jack in the eye. But they had to go on, or Jeff’s sac­ri­fice would be mean­ing­less. They owed him that, to see this through.

As soon as Daniel stepped off the jet­way, he saw a famil­iar face. The blond hair and high, Nordic cheek­bones weren’t out of place here in Ger­many, nor was the expen­sive designer suit. But there was some­thing about the way Uriel car­ried him­self that set him apart any­way. He was still an archangel, even if he was wear­ing Armani.

Next to Uriel stood a dumpy guy with a scruffy beard and a “Frodo Lives” T-​​shirt. Daniel didn’t rec­og­nize him, but the guy was wav­ing at them.

“Dante,” Jack said from behind Daniel, sound­ing both puz­zled and relieved. “What the hell are you doing out here, kid?”

“Long story, sir,” Dante said. Uriel was lean­ing against a col­umn in the ter­mi­nal and still hadn’t moved or said a word. Daniel sup­posed he didn’t have to, he’d brought a human to do that for him.

“A story that has some­thing to do with our friend, here, I guess,” Jack said, motion­ing to Uriel.

“Your friend,” Uriel said, “the good Mis­ter Hicks, fell in with the wrong sort of peo­ple in Wash­ing­ton,” Uriel said.

“The kind of peo­ple who aren’t peo­ple?” Jack asked.

“Some­thing like that,” Uriel said. “I thought, given all the ser­vice he’s pro­vided to this endeavor, that I should keep an eye on him.”

The angel turned to address Daniel. “You have the arti­facts, Mis­ter Cho?”

Well, just get right down to it, Daniel thought. No how are you, or hey, what hap­pened to the old guy that was with you. “Right here,” he said, heft­ing the gym bag.

“Unortho­dox method of trans­port­ing such trea­sures, but any port in a storm, I sup­pose,” Uriel said. “And I trust you’ve seen their… capacity?”

“Yes,” Daniel said. They’d given the scroll a quick once over on the way to the air­port, where Sandy had dropped them off. Given that it was writ­ten in a lan­guage none of them could read, there wasn’t much to do with it. And putting on the hel­met again would have drawn too much atten­tion. Once they got out of the tun­nel sev­eral blocks away from the mosque, Sandy radioed for help and com­man­deered a Humvee to get them the hell out of Najaf as quickly as possible.

“Very well, then,” Uriel said. “Fol­low me.”

He strode away, and Daniel turned to look at Susan, give her a “can you believe this guy” look, but she was doing exactly as she was told, unques­tion­ingly obe­di­ent. Daniel sighed and followed.

Uriel took them to a limo wait­ing out­side, then to a hotel near the air­port. They checked in under assumed names and took the ele­va­tor up to the pent­house suites, which the archangel had reserved for them. Daniel tossed the gym bag on the bed and headed for the shower. He had about a thou­sand years of dust and blood to wash off.

#

Daniel stepped out of the bath­room, tow­el­ing off his hair and wear­ing the new clothes that had been left for him. He felt more human, but he was still exhausted, an—

Susan was cry­ing. She was sit­ting one of the couches, bawl­ing her head off. The rest of them, except Uriel, looked suck­er­punched. Daniel felt the same. He still couldn’t believe Jeff—

“Oh, Daniel!” Susan said as she saw him, ran up and crushed him in a hug. “I’m so sorry!”

Sorry? He gen­tly dis­en­tan­gled him­self. “Is this about Jeff?” he asked.

That just set off another round of cry­ing, and Susan retreated to the couch. Uriel started to say some­thing, but Jack waved him off.

“Daniel,” Jack said, “you bet­ter sit down.”

Daniel took a seat in the suite’s expan­sive liv­ing room. “What’s going on, Jack?”

“We got some bad news while you were in the shower. When Susan logged on to try to upload her video, we found out that the demons have hacked the website.”

“So this is about hack­ing?” Daniel was miss­ing some­thing here.

“No, Daniel.” Jack took a seat across from him. “They posted some videos of their own. We should have sus­pected this after they tried to kill Dante, it’s my fault we didn’t — “

“The attack on Mis­ter Hicks was well after the events — “ Uriel said, but Jack cut him off again.

“Daniel, they posted video of how they tor­tured and killed Susan’s edi­tor…” Jack trailed off, but Daniel could see he wasn’t done. “And your fam­ily. Your par­ents and sis­ters are dead. I’m sorry.”

Daniel felt like all the air dis­ap­peared out of the room. He couldn’t breathe. Every­thing was start­ing to go gray. It couldn’t be true, could it?

“I don’t rec­om­mend watch­ing the video,” Jack said. “It’s pretty graphic. But we’ve ver­i­fied that it’s real. They’re gone.”

“Gone.” The word tasted like ash.

“When they couldn’t find us, they went after any­one close to us,” Jack said. Susan and I don’t have liv­ing par­ents any­more, and I never got mar­ried. And you know what hap­pened to Jeff’s wife and why he didn’t have any kids. Susan’s edi­tor and your folks were all they could find.

“We’re going to get them, Daniel. You have my promise on that.”

“How?” Daniel said.

“Well, we’re going to finish — “

“We’re post­ing a video on the inter­net?” Daniel said. “That’s how we’re going to ‘get’ them? We’re going to take them down with fuck­ing YouTube?”

“It’s a start,” Jack said.

“It’s a fuck­ing joke!” Daniel said. “They’re d — dead, and it’s my fault. It’s my fault again. It’s my fault they’re dead…”

“Daniel, you know that’s not true,” Susan said.

“It is true!” Daniel said. “I couldn’t fuck­ing let it go, and now they’re dead. My m — mom, dad, Leah and Mary, it’s all my fault.” He got up and stormed out of the room.

#

“Let him go,” Jack said. Susan couldn’t believe it.

“Let him go?” she said. “What if — “

“He won’t leave the build­ing,” Uriel said. “I have secu­rity in place. And you, Miss Richard­son, have a job to do.”

Susan nod­ded, and turned back to her lap­top. “How am I sup­posed to post the final install­ment if I can’t log in?” she asked. They’d already dis­cov­ered that not only had the demons killed Stan, but they’d also taken down the New Amer­i­can Cen­tury website.

“I might be able to do some­thing about that,” Dante said. He opened his own lap­top, signed into the hotel wifi and set to work.

For the next few hours, Susan poured every­thing she’d been through along with every­thing she knew about writ­ing into telling the tale of what they’d uncov­ered in Iraq. She gave Jeff the hero’s treat­ment he deserved, and metic­u­lously laid out the case for the exis­tence of the immor­tals. Once they were home and save, she’d turn over the scroll and the hel­met to aca­d­e­mics who could ver­ify their authen­tic­ity, but she wanted the story to stand on its own. And she thought it did.

“Okay,” Dante finally said. “I wasn’t able to regain con­trol of the site, but I did the next best thing. I copied the site lay­out from a cached copy and built a new blog that looks just like it. I won’t have the archives, but it’s the same thing oth­er­wise. Then I hacked the DNS to redi­rect newamericancentury.com from the old IP address to our new IP address. I’ve got you set up on the new blog, Susan, so give it a try.”

Susan wasn’t sure she under­stood all of what Dante just said, but she clicked the favorite to her blog upload panel any­way. To her sur­prise, it came up, and she was able to log in. As Dante said, there were no old posts, but she got to work any­way upload­ing the edited video and her story.

An hour later, it was done. The story was out.

#

The next morn­ing a 767 landed at Rea­gan National Air­port from Frank­furt. The first peo­ple off the jet­way were Uriel, Jack, Dante, Susan and Daniel, fol­lowed by the rest of the first class pas­sen­gers. Jack flashed his FBI badge to get them all past Cus­toms, and they moved unac­costed out to a wait­ing limousine.

“This feels weird,” Daniel said. He was still stunned by the deaths of his fam­ily, but it had set­tled into more of a dull ache over the last twenty four hours. He’d passed a stress thresh­old, and just couldn’t feel much of any­thing any­more. But that didn’t stop the ratio­nal, log­i­cal side of his brain from ask­ing questions.

“I know,” Susan said. “I still feel like a fugitive.”

“Totally unnec­es­sary,” Uriel said as they piled into the limo. “You are under my pro­tec­tion. All charges against you have been dropped, and the gov­ern­ment is even set­tling all the prop­erty dam­age claims out of court to keep things quiet.”

Daniel wasn’t nearly as sur­prised as Susan was about the reac­tion thus far to her story. While it had been a run­away hit with the media, video being rebroad­cast on all the major cable net­works both in the US and around the world, the US gov­ern­ment had already declared it to be a hoax, insist­ing that there was no such thing as angels and demons, that it was all inter­net spe­cial effects. Daniel knew that was the only stance they really could take, if they wanted to pre­serve any author­ity at all, but Susan was crushed. She’d been hop­ing for real, last­ing change.

Daniel knew that the only times things changed, it was for the worse.

Before he knew it, the limo slowed to a stop in front of Daniel’s apart­ment. “You will find things cleaner than you left them,” Uriel said. “The demons ran­sacked your apart­ment when you left the coun­try, but I’ve had a clean­ing crew restore every­thing to normal.”

“Thanks,” Daniel said, reach­ing for the door.

“What are you going to do, Daniel?” Susan said.

“I’m going to try to get my old life back,” Daniel said, and stepped out of the limo.

We’ve all heard the old saw about how writ­ing is such a soli­tary endeavor. And while that’s tech­ni­cally true, I’ve real­ized recently how much the sol­i­dar­ity of writ­ing along­side other writ­ers mat­ters. Consider:

Aver­age daily word count on Rev­e­la­tion while I was still par­tic­i­pat­ing in NaNoW­rimo, ie. up to 50,000 words: 2,041

Aver­age daily word count on Rev­e­la­tion after hit­ting 50,000 and writ­ing “on my own”: 1,161

So my word count dropped by almost 900 words a day once I was no longer “rac­ing” against the NaNoW­rimo com­mu­nity. This is why writ­ers so often hang out with other writ­ers, and this is why I’ll be rac­ing my writ­ing part­ner, Josh Curry, in my sec­ond book, Cru­sade, against the first book of his Pan­theons series. At present, he has a 5,218 word lead on me because I’m still two scenes away from fin­ish­ing Rev­e­la­tion even though we’re five days past the mutu­ally agreed upon start date. I hope to fin­ish that today and start eat­ing into that lead.

Which brings me to, why is it tak­ing me so damn long to fin­ish the first book? My aver­age daily word count over the past five days is a pal­try, even pathetic, 496 words. Why am I stalling? I know how the book ends, I have the out­line straight­ened out, and when I make myself sit down and write, the words flow as freely as they ever have and I enjoy the writ­ing itself. But some­thing in me is resist­ing, might­ily, fin­ish­ing Rev­e­la­tion.

I think part of it is fear of the unknown. I know where Cru­sade is going in broad strokes, but haven’t out­lined it in nearly as much detail as Rev­e­la­tion. I think that has me freaked out and try­ing to avoid start­ing the new book for as long as pos­si­ble. And the best way to do that is to drag out fin­ish­ing the first book for as long as I can. I know this is a dumb idea, and I know that when I actu­ally do start writ­ing Cru­sade I’ll be sur­prised and delighted by it just as I was by Rev­e­la­tion. It’s just been really hard to trans­late that into motivation.

The other thing that slowed me down, frankly, was this blog. Not post­ing itself, writ­ing these sorts of things, but rather get­ting gun­shy about post­ing my rough drafts. Because I’m tak­ing Mur Lafferty/​Anne Lamott/​Stephen King’s advice to heart in these last five chap­ters, folks. These chap­ters suck. I’m doing way too much telling rather than show­ing, rush­ing through things or gloss­ing over them, and I know they’re pretty much going to have to be rewrit­ten from scratch in revi­sions. And if I weren’t doing this in pub­lic, for all to see, that wouldn’t be so bad. But in the inter­est of allow­ing this project to show the process of a work­ing writer, that means you folks need to be able to see the “before” pic­tures, as it were. So please, just bear with me through revi­sions. The end­ing of Rev­e­la­tion will get better.

Okay, back to writ­ing. I have just two scenes to write, and I just fig­ured out this morn­ing that not only is Jack the leader of the demon hunt­ing team in the next book rather than Daniel, but the team isn’t backed by the UN as it was orig­i­nally. It’s backed by the angels them­selves, in a bold and pretty sub­ver­sive move against the demons. This is actu­ally the first vol­ley — okay, sec­ond, giv­ing Susan the data­base was the first — in a war the demons don’t real­ize they’re fight­ing until it’s already too late. Angels are sneaky.

28: The Bur­den of Proof

“How the hell are we sup­posed to get out of here?” Jeff said. Daniel didn’t know, and the hel­met wasn’t show­ing him any other secret doors, assum­ing it could do that. He couldn’t even read the ancient text on the display.

“Maybe we’re not sup­posed to get out,” Susan said.

“Look, missy, I know the sounds of com­bat when I hear it. And Mohammad’s lit­tle pea shooter and gonna do did­dley against mil­i­tary firepower.”

“I think we’re safer where we are.”

“Because an angel sent us here?” Jeff asked. Susan didn’t have to answer; they could see it in her face.

“Great day in the morn­ing,” Jeff said.

“Let’s not panic,” Daniel said, notic­ing how both Susan and Jeff jumped a bit at his ampli­fied voice. “Jack and Sandy are upstairs, I’m sure they have this under control.”

#

This is out of con­trol, Jack thought.

They were at the end of a long stone cor­ri­dor, just above an ancient stair­well. Every time they tried to enter the stair­well, some­one below shot at them. And it had to have been a demon, because it didn’t seem to care about the grenades they dropped past it. Two of Sandy’s men were also engaged in a rear hold­ing action against a band of — Jack wasn’t sure what they were, really. They were assist­ing the demons, but they were human. Sandy’s men had shot enough of them to ver­ify that. But they still had Jack pinned down with no way for­ward and no way back until rein­force­ments arrived to take care of the demonic sym­pa­thiz­ers. What a world.

“Well, Cap­tain Sandarski — “

“Sure,” Sandy said, “throw that back in my face now.”

“ — what do you, in your infi­nite tac­ti­cal wis­dom suggest?”

“Well, we could pour napalm down the stair­well,” Sandy suggested.

“A. You don’t have any napalm,” Jack said. “And B. Even it worked, it would either kill my friends down there or trap them behind a wall of fire we couldn’t get through.”

Sandy nod­ded. “Yeah, it’s not what you’d call a per­fect plan.”

“Any­thing useful?”

“Well, if you’re gonna tie my hands like that…”

“Right,” Jack said. “We need a decoy, some­thing for them to shoot at while we descend.”

Sandy looked back behind them. “Like, say, a dead body?”

Jack looked where his friend was look­ing, back towards the sym­pa­thiz­ers. “Yeah, that might work. Damn, son, all this time in the desert’s made you a cold-​​blooded son of a bitch.”

“I’ll take that as a com­pli­ment,” Sandy said. On his orders, his men forced the issue with the sym­pa­thiz­ers, push­ing them back as though the sol­diers were retreat­ing. The enemy resisted, but not much. Jack fig­ured they thought they were win­ning, that the sol­diers were going to leave their demon mas­ters alone. Once they got as far as the first body, Jack darted in and dragged it back to the stair­well. The sol­diers fell back, cov­er­ing him.

“Okay,” Jack said. “We only get one shot at this.”

“You don’t think they’re dumb enough to fall for it twice?” Sandy asked.

“Would you be?”

“Hey, I was dumb enough to join the Army, so I’m prob­a­bly not a good test case.”

“Exactly,” Jack said. “Okay, as soon as Habib here moves, we chase him. Let them shoot the body, and then we over­whelm the shoot­ers. You guys have zip ties, we can use those to dis­able them. Got it?”

“Have I told you,” Sandy said, “just how much I missed work­ing with you?”

“No, you didn’t.”

Sandy nod­ded. “There might just be a rea­son for that.”

“Go!” Jack shouted, and pushed the cadaver down the stairs, start­ing it off as ver­ti­cally as he could.

Jack and the sol­diers fol­lowed the body, scream­ing at the top of their lungs. As expected, the body was pinned to the wall by gun­fire, and as the lone demon guard­ing the stair­well stepped for­ward, Jack hit him with a fly­ing tackle that would have made his high school foot­ball coach beam with pride. He smashed the demon into the stone wall, and in sec­onds they had it face-​​down on the floor and hog-​​tied with zip ties. They also ripped a rag off the increas­ingly bloody cadaver and shoved in the demon’s mouth as a gag. Jack had to admit, Sandy’s men were well trained.

“Okay,” Jack said, absurdly qui­etly con­sid­er­ing the cacoph­ony of the gun­fire and strug­gle. “Any­body dead?”

All the sol­diers checked them­selves, and they con­firmed that they were not dead.

“Good,” Jack said. “Let’s keep it that way, shall we?” He grabbed the assault rifle from the floor, and reversed the taped together banana clips to ensure he had fresh rounds. He’d count them later, if they lived.

“Let’s move.”

#

Daniel was start­ing to worry about his air sup­ply. He didn’t know how long the bat­tery in the hel­met was going to hold out. But no mat­ter how hard he pulled on the sides of the thing, it wouldn’t budge.

“Here, let me take a look at that,” Susan said. “Jeff, hold the camera.”

“While we’re at it,” Jeff said, “why don’t we just put on a pup­pet show?”

Daniel saw Susan reach up and take hold of the hel­met. She yanked upwards. “Whoa whoa whoa whoa!” Daniel said. “You’re gonna take my head off!”

“No I’m not, you big baby. Pipe down.” She felt around on the hel­met, on top, around the back, down the front. When she ran her fin­gers just under the jaw­line, Daniel heard a faint pop, then felt the padding recede. The dis­play pan­els retracted and his hear­ing returned to normal.

Susan lifted the hel­met off his head, then held it in one hand while she straight­ened his hair. “There. Not so bad.”

He took the hel­met from her and looked into her eyes. “Thank you,” he said.

She was just inches away. “Any time,” she said.

“Ahem!” Jeff said. They both jumped, back­ing away from each other. “I’d sug­gest you kids get a room, but the prob­lem is, see, we have one. And we can’t get out of it.”

“Right,” Daniel said. “Well, let’s look around again. Maybe there’s another way out of here.”

Jeff handed the cam­era back to Susan. “I think I got some great footage of the stones in the ceil­ing, just now,” he said. “Just sayin’.”

#

Jack crept through the dark cor­ri­dors under­neath the mosque. The place was a labyrinth, and he had no idea where this Mul­lah Moham­mad had taken Daniel, Jeff and Susan. He knew they were down here, and he knew demons were down here. It would be bad enough if he was play­ing hide and seek with enemy troops, try­ing to find Daniel before they did. But given that if he found the demons first he couldn’t kill them while they could pretty eas­ily kill him…

“You hear some­thing, LT?” Sandy whis­pered behind him.

“No. Why?”

“You’re slow­ing down.”

“Sorry.” Jack picked up the pace again, creep­ing towards the next inter­sec­tion in the stone cor­ri­dors. It was just about pitch black down here, and they’d avoid­ing using the sol­diers’ lights so as not to give away their posi­tion. They were lit­er­ally blind. He ran his hand along the wall, try­ing to move as qui­etly as pos­si­ble and fil­ter out the minis­cule sounds of the sol­diers clos­ing ranks behind him from what could be demons in front of him. He was also on the look­out for any light sources that—

His hand reached the end of the wall and touched warm flesh.

Jack snapped his hand back and whipped his rifle around, hit­ting the light he held along­side it.

“Turn that off, you fool!” a robed cleric hissed in thickly accented Eng­lish. Jack killed the light. The man seemed to have come from a side tun­nel that branched back the way they had come. Given the half a sec­ond Jack had been able to see it, anyway.

“Who are you?” the man whispered.

“Jack Har­ris,” Jack said. “I’m look­ing for — “

“Daniel Cho, yes, I know. I’m actu­ally look­ing for you. The archangel said you’d be with them. Quickly, fol­low me.”

“Sir, I can’t see you.”

Jack felt the cleric’s hand grab his, and guide it to flow­ing fab­ric. “Grab my robe. Quickly, now!”

“Yes,” another voice said. “Quickly. We’re all very eager to meet your guests.”

Lights snapped on and Jack was momen­tar­ily blinded. As his vision cleared, he saw three demons in Bedouin robes, all hold­ing AK-​​47s on them. Before he could say any­thing, Sandy opened fire on all three, straf­ing them with him M-​​16. The demons returned fire, and Jack dove for the mul­lah, hear­ing the man cry out as Jack drove him to the floor.

“Go, Jack!” Sandy said, and con­tin­ued fir­ing on the demons. He couldn’t kill them, but the bar­rage of lead kept them from advancing.

Jack scooped up the mul­lah and ran the way the man had come. The mullah’s voice was ragged, and Jack was pretty sure the guy had been hit, but they had no time to stop and check. He could hear Sandy and his men cov­er­ing their retreat, falling back behind them. As the mul­lah directed him first one way, then another, Jack quickly lost track of where he was, the sound of Sandy and his men buy­ing them time grew more indis­tinct. This bet­ter be worth it, Jack thought.

Finally the man stopped Jack by a door, and fum­bled for a key. Jack took the key, slick with the mullah’s blood, and fit­ted into the door. It swung open on a dimly lit room con­tain­ing his friends.

“Get inside,” the mul­lah said. “Now!”

Jack heard foot­steps clos­ing on their posi­tion and swing his light and rifle up, but it was only Sandy. He was bloody and limp­ing from what looked like a hit to the thigh.

“They’re right behind me,” Sandy shouted. “Go!”

Jack bolted into the room, push­ing the mul­lah in front of him, Sandy right on his heels. He turned and helped Sandy move the heavy door.

“Don’t close that!” Jeff said. “It — “

The door slammed with a hol­low thud, and Jack almost imme­di­ately heard pound­ing on the other side.

“can’t be opened from this side,” Jeff said.

“As long as they can’t open it from that side for a while,” Jack said, “I’ll take that.” He turned to Sandy. “Your men?”

Sandy shook his head. It was all they needed to say.

“Okay,” Jack said. “Looks like we have a few minu — “

Susan screamed.

Jack looked over and saw that the mul­lah had slid to the floor, leav­ing a wide, wet streak of blood on the wall behind him. He was hit bad, much worse than Jack thought.

Daniel was already kneel­ing down next to him, try­ing to stop the bleed­ing. His hands moved with steady assur­ance and expe­ri­ence, the prac­ticed motions of a trauma sur­geon. But Jack had seen enough bat­tle­field casu­al­ties to know it was already too late.

“Behind — “ the mul­lah said.

“Save your strength,” Daniel said. “Don’t talk.”

The mul­lah grabbed Daniel by the shirt. “Behind the altars,” he said. “The vision of — “ he coughed, blood spat­ter­ing from his lips, “of angels will point your — “

The man slumped over. He was dead.

“The vision of angels?” Jack said. “What the hell does that mean?”

Daniel ran across the small room and grabbed an ancient hel­met off one of two small altars set off in an alcove. “This,” he said. He put the hel­met on and Jack saw the eye holes close off, replaced by two flat black con­vex lenses.

“Holy shit, what is — “

“Quiet,” Jeff said. “Danny, go look behind the altar.”

Daniel walked over to the alcove and began exam­in­ing the walls behind the altar. “I see it,” he said. His voice was loud and deeper than usual, almost boom­ing. “The read­out in the hel­met is show­ing me a hid­den door, super­im­pos­ing it. If you didn’t know it was there, you’d never find it.”

Daniel pushed in on the stones and a small sec­tion behind the altar moved away, maybe two by three feet. It wasn’t much of an escape hatch. “There’s a tun­nel here,” Daniel said.

“Daniel,” Susan said. “It’s pitch black. I can’t see a thing.”

“I can,” Daniel said. “Clear as day as far as the helmet’s concerned.”

“Okay,” Jack said. “Daniel goes first, since he can see what’s going on. Then Susan, then Jeff.”

“No,” Jeff said.

Jack turned to the old man. “What do you mean, no?”

[In the sec­ond draft, have this hap­pen after they find they can’t shut the door behind them]

Jeff took the AK-​​47 away from Jack. “Get a move on,” he said. “I’ll hold them back as long as I can. I remem­ber a thing or two about fir­ing from cover.”

Daniel took the old man by the shoul­ders. “Jeff, you don’t have to do this.” The soft words sounded odd with the helmet’s boom­ing amplification.

“Yeah, I do, Danny. You have to get this story out. It can’t be lim­ited to con­spir­acy nuts like me. You have to make peo­ple believe. You can do it. I know you can.”

The door cracked, and Jack could tell the demons were break­ing through. Jeff started shoo­ing peo­ple into the tun­nel. “Go on, get mov­ing! I’m gonna hole up behind these altars and buy you all the time I can. But it won’t mat­ter much if you don’t get the hell out of here!”

Jack watched as Daniel, then Susan, then Sandy climbed into the tun­nel. He clapped Jeff on the shoul­der. “Thank you.”

“Just look after him, okay?” Jeff said.

Jack nod­ded and scut­tled into the tun­nel. He’d gone maybe ten meters when he heard Jeff open fire.