109 Revelation chapter 9 first draft
9: Arrivals and Departures
Daniel stood outside Second Story Books and tried to look inconspicuous. It was nearly two o’clock, and he had seen several people he thought might have been Susan Richardson, but no one approached him. The problem was that there was no picture of her on the New American Century website, and he hadn’t had time to try to find her on Google, Facebook or Twitter. He had no idea what she looked like, so all he really had to go on was that she was female and would likely be carrying a laptop. That described nearly a hundred people within his field of vision at any given second. He’d picked Dupont Circle because it was a busy place with lots of witnesses, but he hadn’t considered the downside in seeing anyone in particular coming through all the noise.
“Are you Doctor Cho?” someone asked behind him.
Daniel nearly jumped out of his shoes. “It’s okay!” the woman shouted, louder than he’d prefer.
He looked up and down the street to see if they’d drawn unwelcome attention, and seeing nothing alarming, turned back to her.
“Sorry,” he said. “You just startled me.”
“I’m Susan Richardson, from New American Century. You are Doctor Cho, right?”
“Please,” he said, shaking her hand, “call me Daniel.”
They stood awkwardly for a moment, then Susan said, “Well, I’m interviewing you, so I suppose the tab’s on me. Want to get a burrito?” She motioned towards the Chipotle just down the street, and Daniel realized he hadn’t eaten since the day before.
“Sure,” he said. “Thank you for seeing me.”
They walked over and got their orders, not saying much else until they were seated across from each other at a metal table in the back of the restaurant. Daniel took a monster bite out of his burrito and said, “Thanks again.”
“Thank you. You know, it’s actually pretty rare that the subject of one of my articles wants to talk to me afterwards.”
Daniel sat quietly and smiled between bites. He didn’t know if she was fishing for a comment about the site she worked for or not, but he decided he was better off not volunteering anything either way.
“Nothing, huh?” she said. “You’re better at this than I thought. Okay, down to business then.”
She reached into her bag and pulled out a small digital recorder. “Okay if I record this?” she asked, already placing the device on the table between them and turning it on.
“Sure,” Daniel said.
“Okay,” she said. “I’m here with Doctor Daniel Cho, currently wanted by the FBI as a suspected terrorist.” Daniel was thankful she said it quietly enough not to draw attention from the other diners. “Doctor Cho, can you tell me why you’re under suspicion?”
Daniel took a swig of iced tea and looked her in the eye. “I’m not a terrorist,” he said. “I want to get that on the record up front. I’m also reasonably sure I’m not crazy. But after what I saw yesterday, what I’m still trying to find the evidence to explain, you might have to come to your own conclusions about my sanity.”
As he finished his burrito, he told her the story of his last twenty four hours. The crash, the rescue, the missing body. The grin in the alleyway. His arrest, and the discussion with Detective Durante. Escaping the police station, finding Hendriks’s house, and what he found inside. And finally, reading her article about the FBI looking for him, and contacting her to set up this meeting.
“That’s some story,” she said finally.
#
Jeff Frankel pulled his RV off of I395 and into Arlington, Virginia. He needed to find a place to set up for the night, somewhere with wifi. He puttered along until he found a motel that fit his needs. After he secured a room, he parked the RV around the corner and settled in. The place wasn’t much to look at, but his laptop told him he was getting somewhere in the neighborhood of eight gigabits down. More than enough for streaming video. It would do nicely. It also had easy access to a subway station for him to go into the city the next day. Jeff wasn’t sure how long he’d be staying in DC, but he was off to a good start.
#
“That’s some story,” Susan said, making sure the recorder was still running. The tale she’d just heard was outlandish, over the top. Either Cho really was crazy, or he was a terrorist with an absolutely unbelievable cover story. The problem was that Susan couldn’t figure out which it was.
“Mister Cho,” Susan began.
“Daniel.”
“Daniel, that’s…”
“It’s unbelievable, I know.”
“Literally. What do you expect me to do with that?”
He sad back hard against the wooden chair. “Honestly, I don’t know. I was hoping you could tell me.”
“Daniel, let me be frank. You have made some extraordinary claims here. Extraordinary claims require extraordinary evidence. And your only evidence — “
“Got up and walked away.”
“Exactly.”
“But what about his house? No furniture, just crates and crates of priceless antiques and men’s suits?”
“Obviously a warehouse for something, and a quick pit stop. There’s no way he actually lived there, but that’s beside the point. It doesn’t prove he’d still alive.”
Cho — Daniel — ran a hand through his hair. Susan felt bad for the guy. She knew this wasn’t what he’d been hoping for. But as fantastic as he story was, there just wasn’t much she could use. Even New American Century had standards. It was a shame. He was kind of cute, in a harried sort of way, and if they’d met under different circumstances…
“Let’s approach this from a different angle. Why do the cops and the FBI think you’re a terrorist? I know some of it, but not the whole story.”
Daniel’s head dropped. “You probably know more than I do. They never told me why they were busting out the PATRIOT act on me.” Poor guy was beyond the end of his rope, dangling from the strands. “What do you know about it?”
Susan didn’t need to check her notes. “You’re first generation American, and your parents are from North Korea.”
“Refugees,” Daniel said. “They snuck into South Korea just before they got married. They hate Kim Jong Il more than the US government does.”
“I’m just relaying what I’ve heard,” Susan said.
“Okay, sorry,” Daniel said, taking another swig of his tea. “What else?”
“You just moved across the country, you have a job where you have access to emergency systems, and you’re severely underemployed. You’re trained as a doctor, an Emergency Room surgeon, and yet you’re working as a paramedic. You don’t have many social contacts — “
“Hello, new in town.”
“ — and you happened to be at an emergency where you weren’t on duty and something weird happened. You have to admit, Daniel, taken all together it looks suspicious.”
“I’m not a terrorist. I haven’t done anything wrong other than defend myself.”
“Let’s look at the biggest question, other than the missing body. Why did you leave San Francisco, move three thousand miles and get a job so far beneath your chosen field?”
“You know all this about me, but you don’t know that?”
“No one at your old job would talk to me. All they’d say is that you were no longer employed at the hospital.”
Daniel sighed. “Well, at least they’re doing that much for me.”
“What do you mean?”
“Ms. Richardson — “
“You’re going to have call me Susan if I’m calling you Daniel.”
“Okay, Susan, I was fired from St. Peter’s. I screwed up in the ER and got a pregnant woman killed. I could have saved her, but I fucked up. Her widower sued the hospital, and they fired me.”
“Oh my God.”
“And as you might guess, other hospitals aren’t enthused about picking up a doctor that gets his patients killed. Even if they needed a cutter, I’m too much of a malpractice risk. I stopped looking pretty quick.
“Frankly, Susan, they’re right. I’m a fuck up. Stuff like this happens to me whether I ask for it or not. I’ve played it straight my whole life, got good grades, got into a good school, became a doctor just like my folks wanted me to be. But it all came crashing down anyway. And as I racked up no after no looking for a new job as a surgeon, it hit me.
“Maybe I’m not supposed to be playing God. When you’re an ER doc, people expect you to work miracles. They expect you to look at the damage, no matter how catastrophic it is, and make everything okay. I can’t make everything okay. And I decided I didn’t want people to look to me for miracles anymore. I moved as far away as I could, and I got a job as a paramedic. I still get to save lives, I still get to help people, but they don’t expect me to work miracles. It was a good job. I was on my way to building a life again. And then…”
“And then you see a dead body walk away from death itself and you wonder what all of your struggle has been for.”
The look in Daniel’s eyes nearly broke Susan’s heart. “Exactly,” he said. “That’s it. That’s why I couldn’t let it go.”
Susan wasn’t sure if Daniel Cho was crazy or not. Lord knew the guy had been through enough, it wouldn’t be too hard to believe he finally snapped. But something told her, her reporter’s instincts maybe, that there was still more to this story. Something told her it would be worth seeing this through, finding out where it led. And at the very least, if she could help this poor guy get some closure, she’d feel a lot better about herself sitting in that pew Sunday morning.
“Okay,” she said. “I’m in. We need to find out what really happened yesterday and see this through to the end. Let’s get out of here and—
Daniel wasn’t listening to her. He was watching the front door.
#
Jack Harris signaled to his agents. The last hour had been constant activity, but he thought they were ready. They were parked in a van across the street from the Chipotle in Dupont Circle, preparing to apprehend the suspects.
The kid, Dante, was good. Jack thought about having him transferred to the antiterrorism unit. They needed the best hackers they could find. He was able to trace the email Cho sent to Susan Richardson, a blogger working for a political rumor rag here in the city. While they couldn’t read the email without getting a warrant and jumping through a lot of red tape with Microsoft, Jack was able to pull some strings and get a wiretap order for Richardson’s GPS coordinates from her phone. As soon as she stopped moving, they pinpointed her location to the Mexican restaurant across the street and moved in.
He had the DC cops positioned down the street in both directions, but not blocking traffic. He didn’t want to tip their hand. He’d lost a terror suspect in San Diego by being too aggressive. Some of these guys were flunkies, especially the ones from the outer territories of the Muslim world. If the target was from Oman or one of the former Soviet “Stans”, he wouldn’t have worried. They were ideologues and more concerned with their God than with getting caught. But the smart ones, the ring leaders, the ones from Iran, Pakistan, Saudi Arabia and yes, even North Korea, they watched the signs. They noticed when traffic patterns, even pedestrian traffic patterns, tapered off. So Jack had to approach this quietly, with a minimum of disruption. He had to assume Cho was a pro, had been taught by pros. He would notice if they started placing men at the exits ahead of time.
Jack watched up and down the street. It was almost time. At exactly 2:50, the cops were going to stop traffic going both directions on both M and 19th. As soon as the last cars passed, Jack and his team would charge across 19th street and into the restaurant. The place was on the bottom floor of an old townhouse, so there was only one way in or out for the customers. Jack had a plainsclothes officer watching the employee entrance in the alley, but discretely.
[upon consulting a gorram map, turns out the Chipotle on M & 19th is way too far from both Second Story and the Dupont Circle Metro station for my purposes. Move them to James Hoban’s Irish Restaurant, maybe for some corned beef and cabbage, for the second draft. Jack need only stop NS traffic on 20th.]
At just a few seconds after 2:50, the traffic disappeared on 20th and Jack flung open the door. “Let’s move, people!” They darted across the street and into the Irish restaurant.
#
Daniel’s eyes widened as he saw the men bolt into the still crowded restaurant. “Come on,” he said to Susan, grabbing her by the wrist and pulling her up.
“What’s going on?” She tried to reach for something on the table [make her voice recorder and her phone the same thing, so she leaves her phone on the table], but Daniel was already moving and taking her with him. She glanced behind her and picked up the pace when she saw the men wearing bulletproof vests emblazoned with FBI on their chests.
Daniel ran to the other side of the restaurant, towards 19th street. He dragged/guided Susan by one hand, and tipped over strategic tables with the other, trying to slow the agents down. Just add dine and dash to my list of charges, officer, he thought. He saw two more through the glass doors to 19th street, blocking their escape. Too much to hope for that this would be easy, he thought.
“Plan B!” he shouted, and redirected Susan for the kitchen.
“This was your Plan A?” she replied.
They burst through the double doors and Daniel was nearly overwhelmed with the heat and smell of boiling cabbage. “Just passing through!” he said as he continued past the surprised cooks and around the corner near a big walk in freezer. Off to the left, he saw what was looking for.
They ran through the service entrance next to a small loading dock and out into the sunlight north of the restaurant on 19th street. The two agents that had been positioned at the 19th street entrance had disappeared, presumably inside to give chase.
“We’re not out of this yet,” Daniel said and darted across Dupont Circle itself, narrowly avoiding a moving van and then a hybrid owner monkeying around with something on their dashboard before running into the tree-filled park in the middle of the circle.
“I didn’t ask to be in this in the first place!” Susan shouted. “And we left my phone behind in the restaurant!”
“Good!”
“My ass! That phone cost me six hundred bucks! How is that good?”
They ran directly for the Dupont Circle Metro station entrance, and had just hit the escalator when they heard someone shout “Stop!” and then a bullet whine off of the escalator hand rail.
“Shit!” Daniel and Susan said in unison. They ran down the escalator, Daniel shoving aside anyone standing in the middle rather than to the right. “On your fucking left!” he shouted.
The hit the main platform at a run and Daniel was surprised that Susan didn’t hesitate when he vaulted the turnstile. She jumped just after he did, and for once, luck was with them. The train was standing at the station, but he could hear the automated voice telling people to stand back as the doors closed.
“Run!” he shouted as they both dove for the last car just as the doors started to close. They both wound up in a tangle on the floor as the doors shut behind them and the train picked up speed, moving north out of Dupont Circle Station.
#
“Shitshitshitshitshit…” Jack muttered as he raced down the escalator only to see the dim and quickly receding lights of the train in the northbound tunnel. He ran up to the kiosk in the middle of the turnstiles and slammed his FBI identification up to the reinforced window.
“Jack Harris, FBI!” he shouted. “Stop that train!”
The ticket taker mumbled and fumbled around for a phone, clearly shaken. “Wow, I knew we were cracking down on turnstile jumpers, but — “
“This is a National Security matter! I need you stop that train!”
“I can’t, sir! You’ll have to talk to my supervisor — “
“Shit!” Jack said and turned away, leaving the panicked and befuddled ticket taker alone.
“What should we do, sir?” asked Horowitz, one of his agents. “Get PD to the next station up the line?”
Jack scratched his head, still trying to calm down. He wasn’t going to make good decisions if he was upset. Breathe in, breathe out… “No,” said. “Cho’s too smart to get off at the next station, so the local cops would just be wasting their time. Put out an APB with his picture and hers, make sure Metro reports anyone jumping a turnstile to get out of a train station, and give me a location on Richardson’s phone.”
“This phone?” Horowitz asked. He held out a sleek black smartphone. “I picked it up off their table during the chase.”
“God. Damn. It,” Jack said, taking the phone but not snatching it out of Horowitz’s hand. It wasn’t his fault Richardson didn’t take the phone with her. And maybe they could pull something useful from it.
“Come on,” Jack said. “Let’s head back to HQ and plan our next move.”

I didn’t really buy Susan’s motivation here. I think her default assumption would be that the FBI is chasing a real terrorist (and she has no confirmation that Daniel is the right guy until the FBI moves in on them). Also, the only way she could sell an article to her target audience would be to talk tough, so that’s how I think she would start the interview. If Daniel convinces Susan that he’s innocent, she would still be looking for details about a terror plot. She can still sell a story about FBI incompetence but it’s much juicier if there’s a terrorist attack imminent (i.e. FBI is aware of an attack but they targeted the wrong suspect). But if he can’t give her any details along those lines then his story is much less valuable to her. While Susan may be aware of how profiling works, I don’t think Daniel’s background would be the kind of thing she would write about. I think that conversation would work better a little later. I think this conversation should be more focused on Daniel trying to convince her of what he saw. Susan’s “I’m in,” seemed very abrupt to me. On the other hand, no matter what Susan thinks of Daniel, it’s easy to believe the FBI would see her as a conspirator. So the escape scene works, and the final result of Daniel & Susan on the run is good.